I think peer-editing went very well yesterday. I read Caleb and Cameron’s papers and both were interesting topics. I particularly liked Cameron’s topic “Learning to Think” discussing the ways we think, are taught, learn, and why. Both papers are off to a great start! Peer editing really helped me and I’m thankful for the opportunity to revise our rough draft before it’s graded. I have some grammar mistakes that the boys picked up on. Caleb posed two great questions to me that I want to incorporate in my paper: my opinions on what grades should uniforms be for? Am I implying that everyone should wear a uniform. Also to relate uniforms to C of C. Personally I believe that uniforms should be enforced in lower, middle, and high school– I’m not 100% certain about the high school tho. I think college is a time to find yourself and truely develop your idenity/ what you want to do with your life. I don’t believe uniforms should be instituted in colleges (other then sports teams, organizations, etc) and worn to class each day. I am interested to see how my paper turns out. Right now its 13 pages- I have too much info and probably should concise some of my arguments/ opposing evidence. I often explain topics too much that can be summarized.
Have a great weekend everyone!
I’ve never had to wear a uniform to school, we always wore whatever we wanted to. They were talking about implementing them for a while at my high school but never did. It would’ve caused a lot of trouble to enforce uniforms anyway, the main reason was probably the money situation though. Since I went to a public school and there were many students who had parents who wouldn’t like the idea of having to purchase them. I’m glad they never did it because I didn’t like the idea, but at the same time I would have been one of the people who didn’t really care. Besides, there were issues with the way people dressed all the time, my school didn’t make a big deal out of it because they got tired of people being sent to ISS for stupid things like not tucking their shirt in; so my principle tends to start caring less throughout the year. I think it’s interesting that you support the idea though since most people don’t.
It sounds to me like you have a good sense, in the end and overall, of ways you can work on your paper in revision–shortening through summary (getting rid of unnecessary explanation) and considering further ways to connect with an audience who doesn’t agree with you (though not necessarily for the con reasons you’ve addressed so far).